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Dear Sir or Madam:

I am applying for the admission to the International Bachelor Economics and Business Economics program at Erasmus University Rotterdam (EUR) in September 2010. In the following letter, I will explain why I believe that EUR is the ideal university for me.

First, I would like to start with some information relating to my background. My name is Li Ye, and I was born on July 11, 1989. I was raised in a small city called Xinxiang, situated in the north of Henan Province China. My mom is an English teacher working in a senior high school and my dad was a physics teacher. I was raised learning Chinese and English and quick at learning science. In middle school I ranked among the top ten candidates from our city in the Olympic Math Contest held by Henan Province, which enabled me to be selected to the Olympic Math Class when I entered senior high school. Playing zither is one of my favorite activities in my spare time, including playing tennis.

In my first year in Henan University, I, as the leading dancer and leader, successfully organized a dancing program performed with seven classmates for the 2008’s New Year performance in our university, which was warmly greeted by teachers and students. I joined the Volunteer Association of Henan University as soon as I began my university life. We regularly visited the children living in an SOS Children Home, helping them with their lessons and brought entertainment shows to an Aged Home. I have been lucky to have foreign teachers mainly from the USA and Australia to teach me different subjects both in high school and university, which allowed me to have contact with different cultures and perked my interest to study abroad.


Even in primary school, I was fascinated by Olympic math problems instructed by my father at home. I loved reading a magazine named “WE LOVE SCIENCE”, in which there was a file about the famous mathematician, John Forbes Nash Jr. and his game theory, and together with it was a story about how five pirates allocated their money.As I grew up, I learned more about Nash, and found out that he was the Nobel Prize winner for Economics. All these led me eagerly to get more information about economics.

After entering university, I was often puzzled by such questions such as: why have Europe and the United States made such great advances in their economies in the past centuries? Why does China have high economic development in recent years? How long will the prosperity of China’s economy last? All of them have made me curious to try finding information on global business and economics, especially in modern times. Therefore, clear reasons for taking up International Bachelor Economics and Business Economics program appear in my mind. First, such a major is what is needed to provide me with knowledge about international communication, which will help me connect with more people in the world. Second, this program will enable me to live a challenging and exciting life. Third, through case study of typical and normal economic activities, I can explore the inner laws of economics. Armed with such knowledge, I will be able to create wealth for the world.


With this aim in mind, I feel that I cannot only study in China. Choosing a program abroad has occupied my daily affairs since I entered college. One of my friends introduced EUR to me and after having received more information from the internet, EUR has become more and more appealing to me as one of the top universities around the world.

In addition, I am excited about the internationalization of Erasmus University Rotterdam. The thought of meeting new people and making new friends, especially with those who have different backgrounds, cultures and habits from me makes me excited day and night longing to be admitted as a student. What is more, because EUR focuses on the transfer and exchange of rigorous knowledge and on the development of socially oriented analytical and problem-solving skills, studying here will have me be ready for a better future career in the competitive world. Being an EUR student means being in the environment where students and faculty alike hew to the highest standards. I will become distinguished socially and internationally oriented, well prepared for being sure-footed and fully at ease working in a multicultural environment.

In conclusion, if I were accepted, I would show my potential talent and take advantage of the knowledge and education from EUR to go all out for practical economic activities. I believe what I will learn in EUR will help me in my future career. I would like to serve in an international financial company to realize my value as a student from EUR. After working a few years, I would like to go back to school again to get a master in economics. Combining the theories from books and teachers with practice, I would try to shape myself into an expert in economics having my own business at the same time to provide more working opportunities for more people and make more money. I want the opportunity to prove this to myself, to my future boss, and to you.

Thank you very much for considering my application. I am looking forward to your response. It would be a valuable opportunity to study at Erasmus Rotterdam University and I cannot imagine myself anywhere but your university.
Sincerely yours
字数九百多,刚刚不到1000,不知道这样的motivation怎么样呀?

[ 本帖最后由 Ice-xiong 于 2009-12-7 14:07 编辑 ]

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囧囧有神  高级海盗  2009-12-7 17:59:28 | 显示全部楼层 来自: 荷兰
寫這麼多
不是規定maximum 1 Page嘛
你媽媽是English teacher讓他看看就行了呀
nick1885  禁止发言  2009-12-7 21:18:49 | 显示全部楼层 来自: 荷兰
提示: 作者被禁止或删除 内容自动屏蔽
攸酃  中级海盗  2009-12-7 21:43:15 | 显示全部楼层 来自: 荷兰
最后一句真是极品呀
星空下的你  见习海盗  2009-12-7 22:08:56 | 显示全部楼层 来自: 荷兰
不用看内容,看这么多字,老师就不想看了。。。。像楼上说的最好控制在一张纸内,最多一篇半。
这么多即使你写的很好,老师也会不想看的
Salsa  四海霸王  2009-12-8 03:28:26 | 显示全部楼层 来自: 中国江苏南京
I wonder if it is PS or motivation letter.
Ice-xiong  中级海盗  2009-12-8 05:04:20 | 显示全部楼层 来自: 中国河南郑州

回复 2# 囧囧有神 的帖子

就是我妈妈给写的......我也觉得多,不过没有超过限制的一千字,嘿嘿....可该删掉哪一部分呢.....
swufe  初上贼船  2009-12-8 05:41:54 | 显示全部楼层 来自: 中国四川成都
说实话 该着重写的没写够 不该写的写了一长串 前面四段都可以不要  也是最受诟病的套路 我在哪儿生 我爸我妈干嘛的 老外根本不关心这些  老外感兴趣的你在大学阶段的academic experience 你基本是空白 反而写了很多不着边际的活动 好不容易有点academic的了 结果又是primary school的
这篇ml申本科还行 申master还得从头来过
swufe  初上贼船  2009-12-8 05:43:12 | 显示全部楼层 来自: 中国四川成都
建议你看看老外的文书怎么写的
你还停留在上溯三代+表决心的中国式文书阶段
Ice-xiong  中级海盗  2009-12-8 08:25:05 | 显示全部楼层 来自: 中国河南郑州

回复 8# swufe 的帖子

我就是申请本科的.....
sorry,忘记交代啦
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